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I really really want you to just leave me alone
But please don't
You being here destroys me
And makes me feel wonderful
I wish I'd never met you
Because then I'd never have felt this love
It hurts
It nurtures
And I falter
And I fly
And I fall
And I get back up again
And I can't make up my mind
Because the confusion is kind of lovely
But it's all just turmoil
With sweet pinches of bliss
Scattered sparsely
Enough to make me happy
But still to make me cry
Your words make me smile
And your silence stings my heart
And I'd love to cut you out of it
But I think it'd stop beating
And if it stop beating
I'd die
So please
Go
Stay
Leave me forever
Be beside me always
Oh Lord
I just wish this
Crazy
Lovely
Agonizingly
Beautiful
LOVE would
Go on forever.
End.
But please don't
You being here destroys me
And makes me feel wonderful
I wish I'd never met you
Because then I'd never have felt this love
It hurts
It nurtures
And I falter
And I fly
And I fall
And I get back up again
And I can't make up my mind
Because the confusion is kind of lovely
But it's all just turmoil
With sweet pinches of bliss
Scattered sparsely
Enough to make me happy
But still to make me cry
Your words make me smile
And your silence stings my heart
And I'd love to cut you out of it
But I think it'd stop beating
And if it stop beating
I'd die
So please
Go
Stay
Leave me forever
Be beside me always
Oh Lord
I just wish this
Crazy
Lovely
Agonizingly
Beautiful
LOVE would
Go on forever.
End.
...er...yeeeah, so I don't DO poetry...I love it, but I never do it...but this wasn't prose really...so if you think my category for this is wrong...sorry
also, the anger against DA's title limit still rages on. ONE. FREAKING. SPACE. that's ALL I needed!!! ONE SPACE. and DA just COULDN'T GIVE ME THAT!!! -__________-
if this were real life, and DeviantARt was a real person, and he/she/it was standing right in front of me....well...i'd say things i shan't repeat in this more permanent context >.>
FEEDBACK: Like I said, I don't do poetry much (especilly not rhyming poetry) and I feel like there are DEFINITELY areas in here that could be worked through. I'm still not entirely sure of my last I guess 10 or so lines, so any critique you have related to that is appreciated. Also, does the alternating every other line (well, almost every other line) as happy-sad-happy-sad work or does it make it too confusing?
much love everybody!
also, the anger against DA's title limit still rages on. ONE. FREAKING. SPACE. that's ALL I needed!!! ONE SPACE. and DA just COULDN'T GIVE ME THAT!!! -__________-
if this were real life, and DeviantARt was a real person, and he/she/it was standing right in front of me....well...i'd say things i shan't repeat in this more permanent context >.>
FEEDBACK: Like I said, I don't do poetry much (especilly not rhyming poetry) and I feel like there are DEFINITELY areas in here that could be worked through. I'm still not entirely sure of my last I guess 10 or so lines, so any critique you have related to that is appreciated. Also, does the alternating every other line (well, almost every other line) as happy-sad-happy-sad work or does it make it too confusing?much love everybody!
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